Hmm i like it. Its different than anything else i have read. Good job.

Once again, some sentances just dont fit. "i try to remember through a list" it makes it sound like you were simply finding any word that would rhyme. and then in the 4th stanza, the last line does not rhyme at all
i loved the last stanza though"I give you my life
it is a little price
compared to my innocence"
that finishes it off on a very melencoly fasion

ruby