I liked it. The structure and rhyme scheme were a bit off, but as I tend to say in most poems (and I mean it) I think it adds to the confusion running through ones mind in a poem of such. The emotion was properly conveyed, there was just some things that I found a bit odd...such as "What if I make a suicide tonight", its just the fact that people say 'commit suicide'. ANd it seems you omited a word in the last line, did you mean 'ITS obvious you don't care'?. Either way as I said before its a nice poem.

Nice one hun .. like it has been said before keep the,m coming from the heart.. :)