Wow dark poem it is really good amazing job
keep writing
tabby

I liked it but you kept switching person, coz u talked in first like it was abou you then you talked like you were writing about some-one else! (u switched between i and you)! 5/5

I loved how you did the ending personally I'd take out the second to last stanza because it sounds like your trying to copy it and if you are thats fine im just giving some critisism

Amazingly well written dark poem. again the words are chosen brillantly, and the emtions are again deep and strong. Wonderful imangery, very descriptive. 5/5