Comments : Show Me

  • 18 years ago

    by Atomic

    This poem was very good M'Dear.

    All except:

    "Show me the at the feelings

    That we have will still be there."

    This just threw off a nice flow.

    Try something like:

    "Show me that all the feelings,

    We had, will always remain there."

    Something like that. =)

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