WOW... i really liked the poem , and how u used the beginning of the poem, to end it... its so true too...so much depth and meaning... you really give me a different perspective on things.... the only thing i have to say is that it has good rhyming, but you could cut down some sentences to make the sentence structure flow more better in your stanzas.. other than that great work and please comment on my poetry too!

Wow i loved it , you're a great writer
better than ill ever probably be
it was totally transcendent
great
~HazE

OH MY GOSH you poem was fantastic. It really brought tears to my eyes. I can really relate to your poem in so many ways. keep up with the poems mate. :)

Great poem. 5/5 Keep on writing. It was so sad and I can relate to it.

Wow, that was awesome! you are brilliant. i can relate to almost all of it. beautiful 5/5 definately