Comments : Take me to my hearse

  • 18 years ago

    by Tiny Reader

    "Darkness greater than any night"
    This line knocks the flow of slightly, and in the first stanza I think 'My heart it is so sore' would improve its rhythm. But overall another brilliant poem. A couple of minor adjustments and in my opinion it would be perfect.

  • 18 years ago

    by x Saiya

    Another great job. 5/5, lovely flow, very well written.

    Saiya