Great poem, 5/5

luv ya
~*Lollipop Sweetie*~

Such a beautiful vision this poem portrayes, really, you seemed to be creating a scene, and the glimmer of hope at the end was very touching.

Good Writing!
beth

You fail to dissapoint me. Another great piece. I loved how you seemed to break the structure right at the end just as you broke the tone and ended on a lighter note. Very crafty. And I dont know if you meant it but I almost envisioned the person and the tear as one, the person 'running' (like a tear down someones cheek) out of mere desperation. I love the seventh stanza!

Very sad :(
but i still liked it :)
keep in touch
~Em