Its a great poem. To be constructive, im sure u noticed that fault, and call, dont fall into your rhyming scheme. The only reason i brought it up is because all the other lines rhymed so...tightly and precisly. In addition, I would try and make sure your poems have a reading flow (this one does, but is interupted like...once) cause chances are, other readers wont read it in the say manner that u do, but u still wanna make sure you get your point across the way u wanted it across. keep up the good work!!! sorry if i sounded harsh. luv ya. -katrina-

This poem is excellent. Loved the lines
My mind no longer in imagination land
as the knife slowly finds its way to my hand

It is really powerful and the rhymes are good and seem to come naturally to you. Well done 5/5

Yes, its good, but REALLY, its just sooooo dark!!
Okay, I wrote a poem much the same, so I can't really tell you off. :-D

Good Writing!
beth