Really good! i liked the style, and all teh rhymes flowed very well!!! i really liked the way you used rather advanced vocabluary to ge the message across. well done!!!

Ruby

:) :) 5/5

Wow, that was exellent. i loved it. keep up the good work.

I really love the idea of this poem... It makes me think about life and such, and I'm very fond of poetry like that. Wonderful job!