This is normally the part of the comment where i say'oh, i loved this bit...', but to be honest, i don't know which part to put down! it was all amazing, andi think it would be a fairly long quote if i put the whole poem on it!

good work, keep goin.

xXx

You have been favorited. i love this poem. u have mad skill. thats all i have 2 say. really really good. keep writing. i will keep checking lol.

I can relate...keep it up

much love,
becca

Wow.. That's amazing, sweetheart! Beautifully written. I love it! The ending is wonderful. *hugs* Keep up the awesome work, babe.

~Jessica

You are now in my favorites.. and thank you for the advice. "i guess this is good-bye... i wrote that in a note to her today... :-\ but this is a very good poem i enjoyed it *5/5*

Yeah she was kinda mean... but honest doesnt hurt too bad.

Wonderful poem.. I can totally relate, and I love the ending because sometimes its so true. Your own worst enemy is yourself.

thanx a lot for the comment on my poem.. take care

Shouldn't it be "I sleep TOO long?" and that they should "hear" you out.

Those are the only mistakes.
The rest of the poem sounds quite nice, and the peculiar ending saved it from being cliche.

Good Writing!
beth

Firstly, let me say, very well written. You are a natural for rhyme, you do it perfectly, and the flow is spot on. The short lines add to the intensity and tone of the poem. The wording was good too, some interesting lines in here. Your words are full of emotion, and that really comes through to the reader. I only have one suggestion for this; on the second line, it should be "I sleep too long." The ending was strong and summed up the meaning of the poem, very well done!

Amazing job. for some odd reason with this poem i could picture a girl in a basement hitting off the walls saying this poem. yeah i might be weird but i can picture things happen when i read poems or stories. But anyway i just got the affect of it. I really really liked this poem alot. It's kinda weird knowing you want to save your own self but the weird part is to me what i was picturing was you just saying that to yourself to the basement walls no one else. I dunno that's what i seen. But anyway another talented poem. keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.

I love ur style of writing u have great talent

Right my wrongs.
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I really liked this one aswell, I've written one similiar to it. Amazing job. Keep up the great work.

Natalie``