Comments : Our Love

  • 18 years ago

    by Justin

    It has good flow. But no stucture. I think this is better. If your going to rhyme lay it out, For example:
    I did not know where to start,
    even though were far apart

    It is hard for you and I
    to see each other in the eye

    even though were not together
    our love will still last forever

    My love to you is true
    even when it makes me blue

    this love i share with you
    is hard for me to tell
    that I really do love you!!!!!!
    and it will do nothing but swell

    this is a example of how I would have laid it out. But all and all good poem