Hey.. that was pretty gud, the best so far.... u reli captured the reader in the beginning, but in this stanza

Shes bleeding endless rivers
And she turns the ocean bright scarlet
I dont know what to do
And then I think, Now what?

it seems kinda lame, "Now what?" part.. i dunno, it just doesnt fit..

other than that.. ur poem was reli gud.. i was interested in finding out the ending.. kept me reading...

keep it up
Nannoush
p.s. sorry if i sound too harsh