"Hurting the innocent and punishing the weak"

I loved that line. Simple but oh so touching and strong. Also the last line finished it off well. I liked it. Well done on this poem, Makes you think. I enjoyed reading it ^.^

Ooo. I like this one. ^_^ It had loads of meaning, and innocence in it. I just didn't quite like the flow very much. It was like you were cramming too many words into one line, and that ruined the flow. The meaning was great though. Again, summing up the meaning of life in just a few lines. Keep it up. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Bravo! This was a very inspiriring piece. I loved the concept of it and I loved the flow. The rhyming was ok. I have only two suggestions:

1) Break it up into stanzas so that it can be easier to read.

2) Use more punctuation.

Those are the only suggestion that I have for you because the poem is great. 5/5 Keep writing!

Best wishes
Letty

P.S. I am very sorry about taking so long to comment on your poem;but, I have been going through some terrible times lately and I haven't had much time to do anything. Again I apologize.

The flow was a tad off in places, which threw off the rhythmn of the poem. There were also a few places that you seemed to force a rhyme. Some words could have been used differently.

I could feel the emotion that you were trying to convey, and it was done splendidly. You showed a deep concern for the write, which was good.

Overall, it was a poem worth reading.

Happiness
Jeannie