Comments : A veterans love

  • 12 years ago

    by tryinXtoXholdXmyXheadXup

    Great write, the stanzas are worded great but the flow is a lil hard to catch. i love the poem anyway tho. great write and im glad to know there are others out there that are supporting our troops, check out my poem marine corps, or thank god, they are both military poems to, i will check out more of your stuff your good keep at it

  • 12 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    War is sad, it shouldn't happen. I guess an American would relate to and appreciate this more, and even though I'm English, I understood the sincerety and seriousness of this issue.
    I see you write much more simple than I, and although this is welcomed by many on this site, I like poems that make me reread to comprehend the message/s.
    I thought it was maybe a little wordy, in terms of line length and breaks, but that might be just because again, I like concise writes more.
    Thanks for sharing.

  • 12 years ago

    by x Mo x

    That was a wonderful poem. I love it. The military are amazing and this poem made them seem even more heroic! Great Job

  • 12 years ago

    by Kayla

    Awesome.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • 10 years ago

    by Civil Hatori

    Your opening stanza suceeded in grabbing my attention, and I agree with the words you said. The army is indeed amazing for the fact that they protect those us who they hold dear. I think this poem was the slightest bit generic through the military aspect, but I respect it nonetheless. An improvement you could make perhaps is shortening the lines. Looking through a second time, it would work for most lines if you split them in two. But that's up to you.

    A pleasure to read, but a unique twist would help. Overall, 4/5 ^_^ Keep it up

    --Hari

  • 10 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Interesting write full of meaning built-up within. The flow was good as well as the structure. I really liked the imagery which you painted with this piece of poetry. Well written, keep up the good work.

    Peace, Joe