Omg. thats sad. but a really good poem.keep it up!

Hey, i think this poem is one of your best. it's really well written, great work.
it's kool how you're a goth, so am i. lo. i havn't actually met very many otehr goths so yeah. sorry for being a bit strange.
-Suzie

'then the step-farther returns'
Is it stepfather? If its not, ignore me.
'my world is riped in two.'
Is it ripped?

Yet another piece of great work. I think you're filled with talent. Great misery, sadness, and confusion here. Nice flow you've there.

Though there are some grammical errors, I can fully understand the confusion that you display.

I would fix the spelling in a few spots, but it is an emotional piece that you have presented.

--Sher

A sad poem, but beautifully expressed. 5/5

Oh my, what a beautiful sad penned you potray here, simply but well express your emotions write....