That's really cool.
The last line of every stanza fit nicely.
Good stuff.

I like it, but try adding a descriptive word in "In my world" like in the second stanza you could put "In the depth of my world." that way you still have the feeling of deep darkness.

It has good flow though, good job!

This is very good. i like the repitation of "in my world" though out.

I really really liked this. Very good. (sounds kinda like a song. ^_^) great job, keep it up!!

Cool poem. Keep up the great work! :o)

Michelle