- I LIKE IT. SHORT BUT GOOD. IT'S VERY SAD NOT TO MENTION. GREAT JOB KEEP IT UP !!! -

-♥-Anarchy-♥-

I ♥ CEREAL

There are ways you could improve this poem. You could take the 2nd line and split it into 2 lines. That might help. Here is a suggestion:

"Buildings crash, to the floor
Broken windows to adorn
Windows filled with shattered glass
Crushed floors aren't pretty, anymore"

This is just a suggestion that might help with the flow. The last stanza could go like this:

"For help I ask
Show me what happened
Tell me how my life went wrong
Destroyed with those horrible weopons

Why do I deserve
A sad life like this?

Um... Ok... But not good... You try to hard to make it sound sad

*too

And, you want to put this in sad poems, it isn't dark or horror.