Wow..I loved it..I love the end..its so suprising and unexpected..Awesome..Love Joclyn

Hey there your poem was really good. how i wish i was dead as well!

I really love how you write! its hard to explain....but,i love your dark ones, theyre so moving. thanks for the comment by the way! jesxx

Hey:) great poem. its really cleverly written, good twist at the end:)
keep smiling
xxxxxxx

The title hinted of the ending and I thought that the flow was good not choppy. The words fell together quite well. The ending..nicely done.
~Faith