That is REALLY sad.
Its a good poem tho but could work on the flow.
Keep writing its a great way to let out your feelings! well done x)

Hey Brandon, I liked your poem just make like wat lisa said make it flow and have some kind of rythem. srr I'm not teacher I know just trying help, but otherwise I liked it alot--Rachel--

Wow hun i read ur profile and that's truly tragic, i'm so sorry for your loss.
This is a sad poem hun..as intended..'
i hope you're ok.
sorry i couldn't give the wise words as u did on mine...
thanks a lot for the comment xoxo

This is AWESOME!!!
I love it every word flows straight through the next...so much passion and heart ache...WOW great write brandon Well done :D:D
5/5
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Take care ~Keep it up~
Love kirsty xxx

Good one..i rly enjoyed it keep it up hun. LISSA

Wow, this is amazing! It's so sad. I know it's hard to lose someone.. Especially the way you lost him... I'm here if you ever need to talk to me, though.. And you're an amazing writer. Keep up the wonderful work. *hugs*

~Jessica