Excellent write, Ben. I like the way you form the meaning with dust and such. You're a beautiful writer, filled with creativity and originality. You are wonderful. Keep it up, and take good care.

Much love,
Sarah.x.

Benny boy, (i hope you don't mind me calling you that) that was absolutely brillient. it had such depth and emotion. the subject was excellent too, not really touched upon. the words you used were so creative and rightly placed. i'm not sure which is my favorite stanza, but its out of the forth and fifth. I also really loved the way you used the same stanza at the openning and close of your poem. lastly, the title was well chosen, and i like the way it isn't said in the poem, but is the subject. brillient work.

Brad

P.S. if you could give some of mine a read that would be great. i'd love to hear your opinions