Not bad, but please check the spelling, and maybe some of the i's...
What, have you ever seen Shakespeare or any other really famous poet have a poem that didn't have the requested capitals and the good spelling?
Oh, its all a matter of style, I know, but perhaps its a good thing to think about if you want your poetry to be respected.

Good Writing!
beth

Pretty good. 5/5! keep up the great work! :o)

michelle

It wasn't bad, really. I think the message people can relate to and the title was attention getting. Maybe if you want to fix it up add some more details to make an image for us =]