I think this was a really good poem at the star, and flowed very well, but then it just seemed to lose something towards the end.

Brad

The second, third and fourth stanzas are my favorite, and I like how the first and last stanza have the same start, but the third line in the last stanza changes to fit the end of the poem. Personally I think it should be another stanza longer, but that's just me. It just seems you start getting into it and then dropped it to quickly. It's a great poem though, and you're a great person Ben. You don't deserve to be hurt like this, and I hope you know that, and I do sincerely apologize. Please take care, keep writing. xxxx

Much love,
Sarah.x.