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It could happen, we could have a trusting world only if ppl can drop there egos, which is very unlikely, but if we teach our kids when time comes maybe, just maybe we just might be able to have a good world. Keep it up you are good! and check out mine if you have a chance.

Great poem. a very strong and true message behind it

GREATLY SPOKEN!!!!! You need to post this one in the forum... ppl need to see this one... GREAT

XOXO
Kayla

This poem is very controversial. You are arguing a very good point, yet you are discriminating against another nation. I do not agree with the US and their politics, but you shouldn't hate them. Yes, they are ignorant, but they are people too.

Nice one. I like it, It's the truth.

Wow. So much hate in this poem for military control. But if you think of it, the military is a good thing. If they hadn't fought for us, some countries in this world wouldn't be free. We'd most likely be servants or working at a horrible place, with no families.

Anyways...back to the poem lol. The flow was great, and it didn't seem too forced, and the rhyming scheme was very well done. Excellent job. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

You know i love this poem and agree with you. It makes my anger feel so justified.

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Although I think you're condemning people you've never met, I do think you've written this fairly well.

Point to note: No soldier I've ever known or briefly met has ever called themself a hero. And I served for a good long while. That one line is a sleight on all soldiers across the world, especially the ones in Austrailia who defend your right to write this poem. Also you're insulting their parents.

There is no punctuation in this poem, despite the fact you differentiate between your and youre. Is this intentional?

A flag is a standard and standards must be upheld. I just wrote your poem in one sentence without the spite and hate in yours. So my question is: Is it necessary to vent in this manner?

Again, despite my obvious disagreements of what you have written and how it has immediately influced my attitude toward you, this has been written with clarity and consideration to the form, flow and feel.

Bret