The only thing I see wrong with this poem is 3rd verse line 7 instead of "I" should have been 'in'. Yeah something that simple. Otherwise, the whole thing is good. Awesome poem :)

Kevin ,
Very good message with so much truth within the lines .The title fit so perfectly .
I think in life many of us have become the hare , but in reality being the tortoise is the wiser choice .

I had a little difficulty with this part though

you'releft as are you were
as you are one and only
you change as you live
do not force
it comes slowly
Trying to figure out if you meant to put in the "are" or if it was a typo .

Great message told throughout .

A very strong and powerful message within this write. Wonderful....

Smiles, Hugs and Love, Angela

Such a true message. Change can never take place over night and comes so slowly, but if you are patient and consistant enough change will eventually begin to take place.

--Sher

Kevin,
I love the fourth verse in this poem.
How powerful and very true...Such a
excellent write....I will be back to read
more and thank you very much for your
comment...

Shelby

This is truly a work of art...

It is the type that grabs your attention from the first verse...

With all due respect to the rest of commenters, am sure they know far much better than I do in poetry.. But I believe this poem was flawless...

You are definitely on my favourites.

Well Kevin, that's the best read I've had in weeks! Well done.

A book
a class
or some therapy taken
and then you go about demonstrating
to everyone you know
that you have changed
when in fact
you're nothing but the same

amazing, i can relate to that stanza alot!, you go because your forced to , you want to/need to and then nothing happens it kinda flops and then you make the effort to express changes that haven't happened and then they grow and become a natural fakness and then wam, thats gone and your looking around like oh crap

overall a great poem, i'm not one to usually like the ryhme you use in this poem but you pull it off and i do like it in this one . : ) great job

I did enjoy this foray....As I read, I found myself wishing it had been written in 1st person...I reread it that way, and it was powerfully revealing, as poetry is...........
Peace.

Gah,
ur really good
i love this one
its so...
good
lol
keep it up

Love
Tina
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Slowly and for some never....I really liked the message in this, the style is different I liked it nice read.

How apt i'm forever trying to change but fail yet all the while i'm changing

Hi Kev its been a while since i read any of your poems i haven't been on the site in quite a while...but i'm glad i'm back because people like you make the site worthwhile coming to. Greta piece.

Nice!