That's really good dawnie, but then again your poems always are =)

i like how you made it rhyme, but it doesn't affect the poem at all, it still flows brilliantly

This is great! I love your rhyming in this one. You kept it going all the way through. It reminds me of this book i read a while back. lol oh and no problem, i enjoy readinging them ~reply to last comment
Honestly you are my favorite poet so far. yeah well i dont have long so i will be commenting more later hopefully

WOW!! Your a really good writer, I never seen your writing before but I'm gonna put you on my faves and look for some new stuff from you!!! It's.. I dunno amazing.. Like I said Keep writing!

WOW.
I absoluetly loved this!
My favourite part was:

I try to make things better
I try to rearrange
But no matter what I do
I will never, ever change

That really got to me.
I think this is excellently written, and it is my favourite of yours.

This one was really good too, it flowed brilliantly and the rhyming was so close to perfection ( it's impossible to reach perfection, so close to is excellent )

5/5

You havent stopped amazing me yet...at first im like...its something like the movie "The Day After Tomorrow" how they r all running from a storm...but then it kicks in and im like wow was i ever wrong...

Completely fantastic

5/5

Oh wow...
I absolutely frikken love this!
It's so beautifully written, the flow is flawless, the ending...wow.
So hard hitting and powerful.
I LOVE it!