Another sad poem! YAY! Yes, I'm still in depression and sometimes I feel like killing myself...I'm really sorry if this poem really is bad...

I tink dis poem is good! but u need 2 move 4m saddness nto happy!

I tink dis poem is good! but u need 2 move 4m saddness nto happy!

Wow...michael...I hev to say...u improve a lot...and that's awesome...it's been awhile snce I read ur poem...and so happy to see them again...well...they are amazing...

It sound more like a fantasy poem rather than a sad poem. I am not very sure, it's not bad but I didn't exactly feel the flow or rhythm of the poem. It breaks abruptly and starts abruptly from one stanza to another.

But well, that doesn't mean your peom isn't good. It just means that it could have been better. Why don't you try a rework on it.