Nice work nice work!

Ok im commenting!
Don't delete this it really shows people how much you have evolved into a great writer!
Some of this did seem forced but all in all its still better than some stuff I have read!
You could fix this if you just sat down and look at it, and think how you feel bout it.
Want help :D lol..
Well leave it here, just say on it that its your first poem, and ask people to see if you've improved which you have alot!!
Well done! xx

This was your first poem? omg, u really have a talent and i think this poem is really good, and i hope your happeir now than u were then? take care
elnazxx

WOW..thats...WOW..great for a first poem....I LOVED IT..especillay the kitty line..lol....love Joclyn

O0oh...ur first poem...is she your first love 2...well...it's good...considering it's ur first poem...Great