I like it, it has a very certian flare to it

Aww, I thought this was quite good. Lots of adjectives =P 5/5

As usual, great work... two things though, first off here...

"within my very broken empty heart"

might i suggest loosing the "very" as it breaks the flow a bit using so many adjectives

and here....

"with grinning faces if to say"

might i suggest changing it to
"...as if to say"

i dont really like to tell people to change things, as i really hate when its done to me, but just thought i might bring that to your attention is all. anyways, great job, yet again, a 5!

Good poem, the lines seemed a bit long, Keep it up