hey this is a great poem i can relate to it alot. can u plz chech out muh poem my love and tell me wat u think thats the 1st 1 i eva wrote thx!! keep writing!!

The flow was a bit rocky, but the emtions are strong enough to over look that. I think for the most part this is a well written peice. The only sugestion I have is not to take shortcuts, spell out the words, and it will sound better to the reader. Kepp up the good work. 4/5