Comments : To much anger

  • 18 years ago

    by BrokenMisery

    Firstly, welcome to poems and quotes. Secondly keep on writing no matter what anyone tells you, everyone has talent and poetry is a great way to express something of personal reflection. My first suggestion to you would be to check spelling and grammar. Remember the way you say something can mean just as much as what your saying when your talking to someone, the same thing applies in poetry, so use full stops and commas (etc) as if your poem was one massively long sentence. When it comes to spelling words like the 'to' in the title should be 'too' and when transferring a document into poems and quotes, you have to retype all apostrophes or they turn out as 'Doesnâ??t ' for example. My second suggestion is to try introducing metaphors and similes into your writings and experiment with how you convey your message. Reading others work will help you do this. Good luck in the future.

  • 18 years ago

    by Heartless224eve

    I like it. i am her sister just so u know. u put alot of feeling and thought into it i can tell.

  • 18 years ago

    by Heartless224eve

    Good job