"while the pure levitate above
this soft slaughter of hope."

you've managed to portray this so beautifully. tragic and beautiful way to write!

good luck and peace
shobhana

i'd like to thank you very much for your comments and insights.

You never stop amazing me. You are so talented in your writing. Excellent job!

You have a way with your words, tis another great poem gary, the imagery is excellent, i give it a perfect 5/5!!!

Amazing, you always leave me speechless. Imagery is so powerful, and this piece is so beautifully dark and emotional.
5/5, I liked every line!