Wow! awesome poem...i loved it...i wish i could write as well as you do....if you find time can u please check out a couple uv mine as well? thanks...
and oh i almost forgot...KEEP WRITING!!!

dhaval.

AIIGHT, TAKE IT FROM SOMEONE THAT HAS BEEN THERE, THEY NEVER LEAVE THEIR GIRL...LOLZ. WELL JUST TO TELL YOU I LIKE THE STORY AND THE WORDS U USE...NOT ALOT OF RHYMING AND A LITTLE OUT OF ORDER, BUT ITS GOOD. I LIKED IT!!! LIKE DHAVAL SAID, KEEP WRITTING!!!!

::MELI::

OH CHECK OUT SOME OF MY POEMS, I WRITE BOUT THIS ALL THE TIME....

::MELI::

Ur poems prety good.