Hey this is a great poem! I liked it! Keep it up. And hey, if someone is causing you that much pain. They are so not worth it. BYE!
~SMILES~

Of course I have time to go to your poems, remember, I return the favor...=) Well this is really good, some questions i even ask myself. (thx for commenting my poems.)

That was a wonderful poem - and id a perfect example that poems are all about emotion 5/5 =)

Great poem

Hey, this is really great, but now the most common problem I have with people's poems is the format, this one I don't like the format, I like the message but not the format. Heh, it was easy to read with all those lines spaced and that was really good but I think you strectched out the poem too much, when ever I had to scroll down the poem kind of lost it's meaning and by the end I had forgot the beginning, even the though poem is not very long, I would suggest to try and make them into verses and then spacing between each verse.
Wonderful poem.

Keep up the good work.

I have an idea for the verses,

Does:
-life get better after
you have lost love?
-he still really care for me?

Why:
-did he even break
up with me?
-do people cry?

How:
-Many people would I take down after I die, like who would kill themselves over me?

-I dont want anyone
to so how can I change their minds?
-do you get the person
you love back?
-much pain have I caused you?

If I died:
-who would know I'm very sorry?

-Who would know I love them no matter what?

-Who would know that I would want them to still live their
life the way they
would as if I was there?
-Who would deliver
my last words to him?
-Who Loves me?
-Who would care?

Whats:
-The best way to die?

-Up with me?
-John trying to tell me?
- he trying to tell me,
that its over forever?
-This voice inside
my head trying to tell me?
it has some good ideas...

...And the blood hits the floor...
...It's enough to say I'm dead...
...I've made a huge mistake...
...I want you to know...
...I'm sorry...

Once again great poem and I hope this helps.

Thanks it does help me with it... I will do your idea:)

Corinne

WoW!!! Strong!!! 5/5

OMG!!!!!!!! such a strong poem i loved it keeep up the great work