Comments : Sleepless

  • 18 years ago

    by Samantha

    Well, I want to point out that "where" in the first stanza should be "were". But I really love the voice you use in this poem. The narrator sounds so brutally honest and genuine that it hurts me. Maybe I relate more because I've been through something similar...but yeah. I like how you said, "sad streetlights". Personification always makes things more interesting.

    Keep up the good work.