'I see what you were and what you wanted to become' I'd suggest '...wanted to be' instead of 'become' it helps with the flow. Just a suggestion. =)

Anyway, like I've said earlier, if you can break your poem up in stanzas, give it a structure, I think it'd be great. This piece spreads a deep meaning and with these emotions running along the lines, it makes the readers feel with you. Good job. Thanks for sharing. =)