Great job hunny... 5/5

The flow worked well in most of this poem and you got your message across clearly.

However one line seemed to have too many syllables in comparison with the rest and affected the flow:
'In an ending relationships bitter frost'

And did you mean for the last line to say mourn instead of what is typed moun?

Still a good piece though, Keep writing.

Nici

I really like this!!
I think you could make it longer though, lol. 5/5.

Tiffany.xox.

Awww thank you all. Yah it was one of my shorter poems. I have a longer one that I will post as soon as posible. THX
-Kevin

Nice,i like it.

taht's kewl that u got a new account. i saw one of ur posts.

check out my new one.
i like it, i think u would too

Amazing work! touchin peace! keep it up

Hey chica awesome poem