Great poem. and a creative twist to the tow as well. it's a fresh read and you did wonderful with it. great poem

~Jacklyn

This piece is brilliant! fantastic write. you have amazing talent... excellent poem.

Hey Holly.

As Bob said this is faultless in terms of the use of language and the tempo etc....the only this i'd say is that it's a tad cliche, even though it's where it belongs in the dark section....and it is above par...i couldn't help feeling you could have been a little more original with your obvious skill.

Kevin.

Very dark, very subtle. I like it :)

This is absolutely amazing!!! Holly! your mastery of language and emotions is simply astounding!

good luck and peace
shobhana

Wow is all I can muster ... good work

Nicely written. keep writing

Hiyu Holly! ...... brilliant script!
I know exactely how you you felt when you wrote this peice! ..... I`m Looking forward to reading some more from you!

All the best
Dave

Wat a beautiful poem, i love it, you r a great writer. bye.