I'm dying to hear the rest of the poem. This is so amazing. Yadayadayada you know what comes next :D . Anyways, I don't think that this part needs to be in the poem:
Will my mother think that I'm disturbed
if I didn't stash my poems well enough?
She would drag me to a shrink.
This is sure enough.

Good work. Keep it up 5/5

Wow...This was amazing . I can not
waite to read the rest . You are beyond
talented . When I have more time I will
read more of your poems .

Oh yeah, Thanks for the comment and
you were already one of my fav's

Love you
Letty

I see what you meant. Yours is much more advanced than mine, and I think it's excellent. I know what you mean about the ending, although the one you've got is good.

Lol... I read ur post and u were like.. offer end TODAY!!! *grins* sorry I just thought it was funny cause ever1 kinda pounced... anyway... poem... great... I loved it only thing is sometimes it gets a bit out of rhythms but hey! that happenes to the best of them.. that was the ONLY thing wrong with it!! which means it's FANTASTIC!! so don't put urself down lady... uv got talent so keep writing k?