Comments : Velvet divorce.

  • 15 years ago

    by EJ

    Wow that was deep.. and i guess from the title its about your parents maybe? when i read it it makes me think of how my dad treated me before i stopped talking to him.. stay strong! your a good writter! and the poem was excellent.. bye bye EJ

  • 15 years ago

    by ||.SamanthA.||

    Oh my god sabrina!! i haven't talked to you in ages!!!! i love you girllll!!! i missed you!!! lovely poem, it was very descriptive, which your always so good at!!! i love you sooo much!! mwahh!!! we gotta talk sometime hun! mwah!

    love,
    sam

  • 15 years ago

    by ||.SamanthA.||

    *gasp* i just realized something!! you and me kinda look alike!! hehe yay! my hair is almost the same as yours now!!! *dances around* dgalkshg;aslkghakj!! oh me so happy!!!! hehe i love you girl! mwah!

    love,
    sam

  • 15 years ago

    by Stephy

    Wow beautiful ! its very well said i love it-xxx-

  • 15 years ago

    by Tisha

    Oh so sad but filled with emotion.GREAT JOB!
    Tisha~

  • 6 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I'm picking up the mess you've made
    listening to how we were mistake < should this be we were a mistake? without the word a in there it kinda loses people a bit or at least makes it unnecessarily choppy.
    i don't no how much more i can possibly brake
    how much more i can even take

    why do you do this to me < did you mean to put a question mark here like later in the piece
    its like you slit me open and make me bleed
    the check my pulse and pray for me to breath
    you lead me on and let go effortlessly

    like when you catch me right before i fall to the floor
    watch me desperately cry till i cant take anymore

    You have my heart tied onto the thinest string
    you watch it sway
    and watch it swing
    waiting to see what the future brings

    will it fall, or be okay?
    i don't like the games you play
    my feelings wouldn't matter anyway..

    so you can just break me...
    cause i know you wont accept or take me
    you'll tare me apart
    and this time ill fall so hard
    my insides will shatter, along with my heart

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