Comments : Puppet + Puppeteer

  • 14 years ago

    by Lenny

    Wow. Just plain wow. At first the structure made me stutter but once I got the flow of it, it became my favourite part. So many themes and messages all compressed to fit the title so well. The last few lines 'take your pick;
    personality
    changes quick
    and out of me
    drifts

    to fall on my lips
    as sobs and we kiss.'

    Those lines just have such beautiful imagery. Aw now look what you've done! You got me all inspired. Great piece.

  • 14 years ago

    by evangeline

    I really loved this poem although very different than I would have written.

    "to fall on my lips
    as sobs and we kiss."

    This ending, the flow of the words was just superb. Thanks for posting on my work!

  • 14 years ago

    by Wasted Fake Smiles

    Oh my gosh! i LOVE the line
    "to fall on my lips
    as sobs and we kiss" that is SO PERFECT! this had so many messages all crammed into 1 poem..that was gr8! 5/5!
    ~*Who Cares?*~

  • 14 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Good write; I found it an interesting read and original. Maybe think about better punctuation use and capitalise “I,” this will neaten it up and make it grammatically correct. I don’t know about you but I feel when “I” is not capitalised the poem appears messy. Keep writing.

  • 14 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Good write; I found it an interesting read and original. Maybe think about better punctuation use and capitalise "I," this will neaten it up and make it grammatically correct. I don't know about you but I feel when "I" is not capitalised the poem appears messy. Keep writing.