Hey darl a heartfelt piece. very well written.

l0ve always d0ra
-*x00o00x*-

I really liked this. i was really pretty. i made me want to cry. or at least the last couple of lines. i really enjoyed it.

Emma 5/5

I'm commenting on both poems here. The final stanza of this poem and the last of part one I didn't particularly like. They seemed awkward and didn't really seem to fit in the poem, so I would say work on that. Also, at the end of the poem, it leave up to interpertation, don't explain it, explaining it kills the poem. Keep writing and Improving! You said to tell you which to comment on, I don't really care, whatever catches your eye. Thanks!