Good very deep!!!!!!

Lovely job anna! I really enjoyed the story line and the fact that your english isn't perfect made it even more sweet. um... where to put it.... probebly... actually... I have no idea!! i think it's cool where it is! thanks 4 the comment by the way! c u around!

Here he sit don't daring a look... here he sit's not daring to look?
um...
just be busy reading his book... just busy reading his book?

Then each word becomes a man? is that what you wanted to say? I don't know lol

suddenly he looks up...

thats pretty much it lol... I said it wasn't that bad!! *grins* more cute! keep writing cause I really do love it! catch ya later anna

Hii anna, I think ur poem was clear to me and I loved ur english everything was clear n much undersandable!..i think u can put this into cute love:) very nice i luved it!!!!!!! 5/5

Well, Phill kind of cleared everything up, this is great. I can't say I LOVE the ending though, it was abrupt and it cut short. I am sure that you could do better on the ending because you are a great poet, I really like the length also.

Keep up the good work.