This was a really good poem. I wouldn't really see this as a dark poem, but more of a sad poem. I didn't see any element of darkness, you need images in this poem to create a haunting effect.

"My friend, I cared so much
But in the end you won't remember the times I cared"
I didn't like the repitition of 'cared' here, I thought it was too close together to be beneficial to the poem.

The poem was a lot about emotion, and very little about rhythm or rhyming, which is fine. I'm glad that there were plenty of details, because details are what it is all about when it comes to poems that might otherwise be cliche. Without details or a unique topic, what the heck are poems anyhow? Good work.

In both of the poems I've read so far you used the metaphor of being alone in a crowded room, but you used them to convey a different message in each, and I liked that. I think this poem was great, and I really enjoyed reading it, it had a style all it's own, and it rang true to me. great job, 5/5

Ravyn

This is sad, but also quite inspirational, that the character did leave in the end.

I love the structure you've used. It's so varied, which makes it interesting.

"At one time there were smiles, infectious and fun"

And that line I love. We all reminisce of good times, but the reality is always there.

Great work. x

I'm pretty sure I like rhyming poems better for they're easier to make flow though harder to write, but I for some reason really liked this. I'm not sure why, but it just stuck out to me. Great job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Wow...i loved this...you put so much emotion in it!