Good poem but a little too long

Though the form and structure are not great the contenct and your descriptions more than make up for this.

I agree it was too long and not much structure I guess, but I kinda was writing it and it's not relly a poem just a short text I guess.

Long with little structure but there's a flow that's kinda like a story. The content was good and the word choice was great. Other than the structure and length it was interesting for what it contained.
~Unforgiven