This is great. the flow in the 4th stanza is a little disturbed but it is recovered by the 5th stnza very well.

5/5

Dude that is awsome
thanks for the comment on my poem

Very strong. I liked this a lot.

-Taylor

Really sweet poem, very nice rhyming too... keep it up

(ps. pplz rate my poem 'a name' plz)

You're poem is so sweet it is like a tru storie that made me change my mind

So ~THANKS~

Hey thanx for the comment! lol, it was awesomies! i luvd it!!! i luv this poem too! it's a really good story that i don't think a lot of ppl would've come up with... or maybe they do. i just don't read it. lol, but very nice poem! 5/5
asian luv alwayz, thao anh mai

Gr8 poem! i know i wouldnt have thought of something like it! btw thanx for the comment i appreciate it ;)

This poem made me think about a lot of stuff I really enjoyed it though...because once you start to read it, you cant look away. Much respect as a writer...thanks for the comments to hun!

♥ Brooke

Awesome poem! 5/5 its really great.... luv ur work!
Jess

Damn thats deep

Wow i really enjoyed reading this poem..its sad..but it has something that wouldnt allow me to stop reading...Great...Joc

Nice,
A Bit disturbed though lol.
I Loved it though.
5/5
Kudos!!
Much Love
-xx