I really like this poem. I totally give it a 5!

Hey.. this is quite good.. and i aint complaining bout the stanzas.. i lyk em the way they are.. in fact, a v big part of the reason i lyk the poem is coz the stanzas are in their own unique style.. i also lyk u repeating the "I can feel you slipping away from me" part.. added to the feel and emotion of the piece.. gr8 job
keep it up
NannO
thnx 4 ur comment

Wow...this was really good, seriously. i love the way the stanzas are, there should be no complaints! also, you dont know how many times i've felt this way before...i just never found a way to express it the way u did. beautiful job. by the way, thanks for your comments too, i'm glad you understood my poems (they can be confusing at times).

This poem is perfectly fine the way it is....I like it, very good.Great emotion and I really like the way the stanzas are written...really adds to my liking..hope to read more of yours.