Comments : Blade Of Sorrow

  • 18 years ago

    by Absolute Broken Perfection

    Very well written, keep writing

  • 18 years ago

    by Taylor Porton

    Aw thank you for the comment.

    This is a good poem, but I have one suggestion. Where it says "Sometimes he gets loud."

    replace with "Sometimes he gets so loud" So the poetic timing would place emphasis on the word "so" and the pentameter would flow better.

    Other than that its great! :)

  • 18 years ago

    by †Undone♥

    Thanks, I will change it!