Comments : A Simple Little Thing...

  • 18 years ago

    by The Wingless

    Hehe I love this rhyme scheme. It rules. But I have one problem, the words health and wealth were used once, and I don't really think they are the strongest of all rhmyes. Maybe it is just me. I don't know.

    Keep up the good work.

  • 18 years ago

    by Jaime

    I'm assuming ^he meant "himself" and "wealth", which don't rhyme the best, but they work.

    "Others pray for unimportant stuff,
    Like money and Wealth."

    Although self-esteem is important, I think most people would say that beauty falls into the category of unimportant. However, it's important to you, and it's your poem, so it's all good.

    The ending wasn't quite what I expected, but I did like it. Overall, awesome poem, 5/5.