AWW I LIKE THIS ALOT HUN, EXPRESSES ALOT, VERY AWESOME, XOX RACH

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Laterz,
Shirlz

Interesting - The flow was good, but some of the lines seemed out of place, and I think it would have been better to leave out 'Peace out' at the end. Other than that - really great message and well put across.

Peace. [Sole]

I know you were searching for criticism, and I'm sorry to disappoint you, but this poem is just too good for criticism. Everything stated in it is so entirely true, it connects to the reader firmly, that no fault can be found! 10/5

Great poem lotz of feeling into it, 5/5