Heya... i lyk that so far... complete it and i shall comment

Wow yai finally some new work!!

granted effortless grace and a paralyzed face

ohh i love that line , its beautiful and i can relate, beautifull trinkets new things that almost consume you
or thats what i get

yai for creative juices flowing!

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Very descriptive

gurl from library
Catherine Stephens(Here is my e-mail
(kitcat818@yahoo.com)

Wow. Lovely poem, Jeffrey. 5/5

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Lvoe he big words.still again no basis of detail..the poem jus is i feel..no offense jeff. Excellent poet but it needs moer color but reason..use detial...again awesome workk.

Lissa

The simple sight ignites a consuming control
to barter your mind, body, and soul

^^ Jennifer likes that part =ll
Overall Rating: 4.4/5